Flash fiction challenge from Terribleminds.com

So, I’m excited to finally see these things coming back, Chuck has been sick for a while and took the holidays off. I didn’t realize how much of my traffic here came from his sandbox. Anyhow, we are supposed to pick an image and write a story about it. Here’s my image…


Negative Impact.




A red-tailed hawk circled below, rocking in the thermals as it surveyed the landscape for prey. The foliage was turning to autumn colors, but hadn’t reached the tipping point yet. Green still dominated the canopy. A flash of reflected sunlight glinted off a windshield from the road, so distant that she couldn’t tell what kind of vehicle was passing.

There were plenty of other things below, but these were the things she focused on. She could see the lake, miles away. The same lake where she and Dave had been swimming, just yesterday. Their parked car, the gravel road they had driven to get here, a field of corn nearby. The Red River Gorge stretch around her. Nearby, there would be hundreds, if not thousands, of people coming and going from Natural Bridge State Park. She scanned the horizon for new things to see.

The wind was kicking up, and tears distorted her vision. She blinked them away, pulling up the fabric of her sports bra to dab her eyes dry. While they were closed, she could feel herself rocking in the wind, just like the hawk. Forcing the panic back down into her belly, where she had kept it stored all afternoon, she made herself open her eyes again. Looking up this time, she examined the gear for at least the hundredth time. The carabiner on her harness, the webbing that led up to the last nut holding her to the cliff. When Dave fell, she had watched helplessly as his equipment ripped away from the crumbly rock like the teeth of an opening zipper. She tried to hold him, but with no leverage from above the rope burned her hand. She held on anyway. Their eyes briefly met as he fell limply past her. She couldn’t stop him. You can’t argue with physics. Her right hand was an agony of angry burning flesh. Her middle finger was pulled into the gear, simultaneously skinning and breaking it. Only then did she let go, finger grotesquely bent, meat and skin hanging off in strings. He had pulled her off the ledge where she was belaying him, her gear exploding out of the wall just like his. Except for that one nut. And from that one nut, came a thin wire, looped through a carabiner, and from that carabiner one strip of orange webbing.

She closed her eyes again. “You’ve been here long enough. You have to do something.” She fortified her nerves as best she could. “One hand. No gear. Concentrate on those things.” And don’t look down. Not at the rocks. Not at Dave. Eyes open. She stuck her foot out, waiting as the wind rocked and twisted her until at last she touched the sandstone. Lichen fell away beneath her foot, but the stone remained solid. Even this miniscule contact with the Earth was calming after hours of hanging from a piece of iron smaller than her thumb. There was a handhold above. She could use her right arm, but her hand was wasted. I could leverage my arm against the webbing to pull myself up, then grab that handhold with my left hand. Of course, if I try that I might pull the nut out of the wall… She studied the cliff around her. There were no other options.

She looked her protection over again, barely able to see the nut. It was probably for the best that she couldn’t see it. She followed the orange webbing down from the carabiner, focusing on the buckle. This was the webbing she hung her gear from when she climbed. It was back-up protection at best. It wasn’t meant for this kind of strain. But the buckle was holding. She wandered at the physics of a buckle of steel, holding all that weight using nothing more than friction. I’m wasting time.

Just as sudden as the fall had been, her psyche clicked into place. Her forearm wrapped around the webbing and she yanked herself upward, levering off the precious foothold and grabbed the cliff with her left hand. Testing the rock below, she found a new foothold, higher than the last, and pulled up again. She jammed her right hand into a crack. Taking a deep breath in preparation, she forced it to close into a fist. It was like holding the hot end of a blowtorch in her closed palm, but she ignored the pain and pulled up. She screamed as she reached for the ledge, her good hand scrabbling for something, anything, to grab.

From the corner of her eye, she saw the nut drop from the wall, then felt its gentle tug when it fell to the end of the webbing. After hours as the only thing holding her to the rock, their roles were switched. Now she was the only thing stopping it from plunging into the precipice.

Nothing was changed about her climbing. Her hand still screamed at her; she still screamed at the iron deposits and sandstone. But the knowledge that her last piece of protection had fallen out and her safety zone was suddenly zero seeped into her chest like water into sand. All thought disappeared. Fear vanished. The pain was a memory, long gone. She scrambled up onto the ledge and collapsed, grateful for the rest and safety of a stone shelf high on a cliff face. Spasms took over her major muscle groups as she lay there, arms and legs vibrating, each to their own rhythm. Safe. For the moment.

Her gear bag, as well as Dave’s, were on the ledge. There was more than enough rope in those bags to get back to the bottom of the cliff. I just have to trust my gear. She raised the orange webbing, the one that she had dangled from for hours, to inspect it.

The buckle that had been holding it together was gone.



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12 responses to “Flash fiction challenge from Terribleminds.com

  1. moteridgerider

    Great piece of writing. I was right up there on the cliff face with her. I’ll be writing a climbing scene in my next novella – if I achieve a fraction of the realism you’ve reached with this, I’ll be a happy man. I’ve got my picture for Chuck’s challenge. Now I’ve just got to get the ideas flowing.

  2. Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed that!

  3. “I felt inspired so it’s a victory, right?!” Indeed. Vivid, just like the pic:) Happy Writings. Thanks for sharing this lovely piece… with no geese.

    • Can you imagine, while she’s hanging there some random gaggle of geese comes in, stabbing at her soft parts with beaks and homemade shivs made out of sharpened toothbrushes? Man, that would have been awesome…

  4. Cool, I liked it, especially the end.
    One thing, though – a sports bra is usually tight so pulling that to wipe her eyes doesn’t seem like an easy thing to do, considering her situation.

  5. Hm, thought they were kinda spandex-type stuff and stretchy…shoulda looked into it more before writing it, I suppose. Was just thinking it would stretch from a shoulder to an eye. I’ve seen girls do it with something I thought was a sports bra. Then again I know nothing about women’s clothes, I barely know yoga pants from a prom dress!

  6. Nicely done.
    You set the scene quite well. Plus twists! I love twists at the end.

  7. Nice. Good tension and the twist definitely took me by surprise. The ending got me too – should we infer that somebody messed with the webbing, like maybe Dave? I like that. 😀

  8. Oh gosh, I felt like I was her. And that last sentence!

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